Rachael's genre of interest is writing lesson plans. She is interest in working with kids, the rules are easily followed and the purpose of the piece is easily to read and is clear.
Suggestions for improvement. I have taken a child care class where we had to write out lesson plans for our midterm and final grades and the one thing that the teachers stressed about was making them super detailed. You are talking to someone who has never been in your classroom so you want your lesson plans to be very detailed and clear.
Is the piece full developed?
I would say no, if you add a little more detail, and maybe write out more than one activity for that day.
Is the piece organized in an appropriate way? Is there anything confusing?
Yes, the piece is very organized. You have a list of the materials needed, and you explain the activity well. There was nothing confusing.
What is most memorable? why? are the tone and voice appropriate?
I would say that the most memorable part about the piece would be the song. Its a cute song for the young children to know. The tone is also appropriate for that kind of age group.
1) What is their genre? What is their interest? Are the rules of the genre being followed/bent/broken? Which rules? Is the purpose of the piece clear? Give suggestions for improvement. The genre is making children learn the months of the year threw a song. Her interest is helping children learn my using mnemonics. Using a song to help children learn. She broke her piece by prerequisites, objective, materials, procedure, assessment, and then the lyrics for calendar polka. Your piece is very clear and has a good flow, which is straight to the point and very explanatory. No rules were broken I’m guessing you are making a lesson plane.
2) Is the piece detailed and fully developed? Give suggestions for expansion. The piece is very simple but I think that’s how a lesson plan should be which is straight to the point I don’t think any expansion is need I only think you will have to have multiple of these lesson plans. I like the idea of learning a song with lyrics a good way for little kids to remember things and its fun.
3) Is the piece organized in an appropriate way? Is there anything in the piece that is confusing? The piece is very self-explanatory and is organized very nicely. I like how the points were made and were straightforward.
4) What is most memorable about the piece? Why? Are the tone and voice appropriate? The tone and voice are appropriate because she is telling what is going to happen being straightforward and getting to the point this is how a lesson plan should be. I like that you included the song at the bottom and was the most memorable part of you piece.
5) Are there any language and convention issues? No the language is clear.
Rachael, Nice work so far. Your lesson plan is detailed, clear, and easy to read. Work on expanding your piece using the same formatting you have already employed.
Rachael's genre of interest is writing lesson plans. She is interest in working with kids, the rules are easily followed and the purpose of the piece is easily to read and is clear.
ReplyDeleteSuggestions for improvement.
I have taken a child care class where we had to write out lesson plans for our midterm and final grades and the one thing that the teachers stressed about was making them super detailed. You are talking to someone who has never been in your classroom so you want your lesson plans to be very detailed and clear.
Is the piece full developed?
I would say no, if you add a little more detail, and maybe write out more than one activity for that day.
Is the piece organized in an appropriate way? Is there anything confusing?
Yes, the piece is very organized. You have a list of the materials needed, and you explain the activity well. There was nothing confusing.
What is most memorable? why? are the tone and voice appropriate?
I would say that the most memorable part about the piece would be the song. Its a cute song for the young children to know. The tone is also appropriate for that kind of age group.
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ReplyDelete1) What is their genre? What is their interest? Are the rules of the genre being followed/bent/broken? Which rules? Is the purpose of the piece clear? Give suggestions for improvement.
The genre is making children learn the months of the year threw a song. Her interest is helping children learn my using mnemonics. Using a song to help children learn. She broke her piece by prerequisites, objective, materials, procedure, assessment, and then the lyrics for calendar polka. Your piece is very clear and has a good flow, which is straight to the point and very explanatory. No rules were broken I’m guessing you are making a lesson plane.
2) Is the piece detailed and fully developed? Give suggestions for expansion.
The piece is very simple but I think that’s how a lesson plan should be which is straight to the point I don’t think any expansion is need I only think you will have to have multiple of these lesson plans. I like the idea of learning a song with lyrics a good way for little kids to remember things and its fun.
3) Is the piece organized in an appropriate way? Is there anything in the piece that is confusing?
The piece is very self-explanatory and is organized very nicely. I like how the points were made and were straightforward.
4) What is most memorable about the piece? Why? Are the tone and voice appropriate?
The tone and voice are appropriate because she is telling what is going to happen being straightforward and getting to the point this is how a lesson plan should be. I like that you included the song at the bottom and was the most memorable part of you piece.
5) Are there any language and convention issues?
No the language is clear.
Rachael,
ReplyDeleteNice work so far. Your lesson plan is detailed, clear, and easy to read. Work on expanding your piece using the same formatting you have already employed.